The Basics at GCSE #2

Last time, we looked at the basics within English language, so now, I want to take a step further and see if you can get your head around this which I am about to type. It covers similar ground, but in places, goes a little further and in some cases, covers new ground, so we could call it Basics #2 if you like. Last time, we looked at the basics within English language, so now, I want to take a step further and see if you can get your head around this which I am about to type. It covers similar ground, but in places, goes a little further and in some cases, covers new ground, so we could call it Basics #2 if you like.

For GCSE purposes, you need to know what each element does and how a writer adopts these things into their work. When you can know this, writing those horrible PEED chains will be oh so easy for you.

Once again, we look at word level, sentence level and then whole text level. Where possible, I shall leave the task in for you.  At other times, it shall be just information.
Enjoy!

Nouns & Possessives

Nouns are names of things. Common things we use every day are called common nouns; table, cloth, pen, pencil etc. Proper nouns have capital letters because they are usually names like James or Sarah. But what about when we think of words like Flamingo? It is a proper noun, yes, but what if we have to use the plural rule. Suddenly, you are tempted to write Flamingos or are you tempted to write Flamingoes?

The answer would be Flamingoes. What then, about the word housewife, which is a common noun used to name someone and the position in life they are in. When we write about more than one, do we write housewifes or housewives? The answer is housewives. It is a little tricky but the more you try to find these things on the likes of Google, the easier it will be.

Then there is something called the singular or plural possessive noun which is where we use a single word or a word to denote more than one. If we write The boy’s jacket then the noun is singular because it is one boy and one jacket. If we add to that and write The boys’ jackets then it becomes plural possessive.

Pronouns

Pronouns are those words we use when we do not want to continue using a name in a piece of writing. For example, if you wrote a story that had Stephen said this. Stephen said that. Stephen did this. Stephen did that, it would soon become boring to read so we use words like he and she, or words like they if writing about more than one person. Words that can be used as pronouns can include: anybody, each, nobody, something or both, few, many and all.

Verbs

Verbs are action words, or words that do something. We write that James walked to the shop and we know that walked is the verb, but to take your understanding a little deeper, there are three types of progressive verb in that there is the past progressive verb, the present progressive verb and the future progressive verb. Now, that sounds very odd, almost like a science doesn’t it? But it is easy to remember.

When you write the actor will be playing Macbeth in tonight’s performance you are using the future progressive verb because it is to be in the future. Likewise, if you write June and her partner are going on holiday today, you are using the present progressive verb. The same would be true if using the past progressive verb if the word used was in the past tense.

Adjectives

Adjectives are describing words. They tell us more about something or someone. In the year 7 unit we considered the black cat sat on the mat and then added words in to describe the cat and the mat. Here, we use another thing entirely, the girl with the flower tattoo. If we want to add in some adjectives, to make the sentence better, we might write the young girl with the small flower tattoo. If we want to go further, we can add words to make it the young, vivacious girl with the small, yellow, flower tattoo. Suddenly, the sentence is better, but be careful, for if you add too many in, it simply becomes too hard to read and understand.

Then there are the comparative and superlative adjectives like larger [comparative] and angrier [superlative – because it goes one step further than angry]. We use them on a daily basis and do not think about them at all. They are so easy to use.

Adverbs

Adverbs are those words that extend meaning to the verb. So, if we write Paul was cycling home as a sentence, we add the word quickly in there to show how fast he was going.

How many adverbs do you know, that end with -ly? Make a list on a piece of paper now.
Now, consider how we use words like quicker or better. We do so using adverbs like this to expand the meaning of a sentence, or a piece of school or college work. The better your writing is, the more accurate it is, the higher the grades you will get when you take a test. That is why knowing this is important.

Correlative Conjunctions

A conjunction is a word that joins two sentences or clauses together. Correlative conjunctions are those that are paired to make sense. Words like neither and nor or either and or are correlative. There is usually a similar length to them and the sentence they are in. An example of this would be we can go to either Greece or Portugal for our holiday. Consider this sentence: Both James and John had the same father in Zebedee. The word Both and the word and are correlative because they balance the sentence out.

Words That Confuse – Homophones

A homophone is an interesting word indeed and one that causes so much trouble wherever it goes and is used. This is because there is sometimes more than one way to spell a word that sounds like another. Consider the words lesson and lessen. They have two very different meanings but sound exactly the same. Such is the problem with the English language at times. Words like there, their and they’re confuse the life out of us and we make mistakes, especially on social media, like Facebook, every day. For an English teacher, there can be no mistake worse than getting the wrong word in there like this, using a homophone.

Other words that can get confused are whose and who’s. On the Department for Education website in the UK was once a list of 100 words that are always spelt wrongly by 16 year old students. Both of these were on that list! That is how easy it is to get them confused. Other examples of words that confuse are your and you’re, as well as are and our. My pet hate is the two words being and been. Such an error is huge in your written work, for the meaning of the sentence is destroyed when you use the wrong one.

Task: Which is the correct use of the word in the 4 sentences below.

1. Which way is it to your/you’re house?

2. It is a long way for us to walk to are/our school.

3. I have being/been to the cinema today to see the latest Pirates movie.

4. “Who’s/Whose the person responsible for this devastation?” asked the teacher.

Commas

Commas are those wonderful things we slip into sentences when we want to take a pause, so we do not run out of puff when trying to get a very long sentence out. If they are used correctly, then they allow us to take a breath and take our time with the sentence. But they are much more than that. They can aid meaning immensely.
Consider this old favourite of English teachers, the sentence that reads:

Let’s eat Grandma.

What does it mean? Does it mean that for dinner tonight, your Grandma is on the menu? Well, unless there is a comma in there, it does! Let’s eat, Grandma is a different thing altogether and the inclusion of one single comma has made it so that we can understand. Likewise, what about this one: The black, slinky, furry cat sat on the old, shaggy, brown, dilapidated mat. Six adjectives are used there to describe cat and mat, but without the commas, to tell you to take your time, the meaning is lost.

So, what do we do when we have to put commas in compound and complex sentences?

Well, whatever the sentence is about, we need to think about where it is best to put them. Try this sentence for size. At once the boy moved forward in his chair to see if the teacher was putting his name on the board.

How many commas should there be in that sentence? One? Two? Or more? The answer is a subjective one because so long as meaning is carried in the sentence, there really is no wrong answer. As soon as a sentence makes sense, because a comma is not used or used wrongly, it becomes difficult to read.

Hence…

At once, the boy moved forward in his chair, to see if the teacher was putting his name on the board.

Two commas, in my thinking, are needed in this sentence but some would argue that there is no need for one after the second word.

What about this sentence?
The burning sensation crept up his arm as the man fought the fire back and seeing the flame developing he decided to leave the building so as to make his escape.

How many commas are needed here? The answer is below.

The burning sensation crept up his arm as the man fought the fire back and seeing the flame developing, he decided to leave the building so as to make his escape.

Some would argue one comma here but others would say there is a need for one to go in after the word and because it is a conjunction, joining together two sentences. This is where different teaching makes English very difficult to understand. I was always taught never put a comma before the word ‘and’ but there has been a change in thinking, as language has changed, about this and there is something now called The Oxford Comma, whereby you are allowed to use it. What you need to understand is that the English language is always changing.

Commas With Direct Address

That sounds rather grand doesn’t it? No, it does not mean where it lives either. But what this refers to is where there may be a name in a sentence. If we were to write There is a bus to the theatre tonight isn’t there Mrs Brown then we would expect to see a comma before Mrs Brown. Possibly, we might even see one before isn’t as well. Have a look at how I have used commas so far in this introduction and see where you should pause when reading. Then try to do the same in your writing.

Colons and Semi Colons

My old Chemistry teacher, Mr Smith, taught me nothing much about Chemistry, because I did not listen, but he did teach me something about the colon and how to use it. Whilst dictating to us, reading out of a book for us to copy, one day, he said “Colon; for the ignorant, two dots, one above the other.” He did it for a bit of fun and in a funny voice, because he was like that and before too long, whenever we had to do this, he would say the word colon and we would all say together the words that followed. It was like a catchphrase.

This is what it looks like [:] and it is used for certain things. The first is to make a list. If we write The boy went to the shops to buy some food: bread, margarine, jam and scones then we are saying what he went to the shops to buy. We can just leave a few words out and make a list, but the best way to do it is to do it this way. The other time these are used is when putting two ideas together. Look at this example taken from the Internet.

Some spiders are able to catch and eat: they’ve been known to overcome fish five times heavier than themselves.

The use of the colon splits up two things which are related in the same way that a semi colon [;] would. The first part of this sentence is about spiders but then the word they’ve is used so it is about the same spiders in the second half of the sentence.

So, how do you know whether to use a colon or a semi colon? My answer to you is simple; make a list with a colon and split sentences with semi colons and you will never get them mixed up. Also, when you use a semi colon do so making sure that there is a balance to the sentence. For example, consider these two sentences.

The girl played the violin so well and she was an expert at the instrument.

You could say they are two sentences on their own and you would be right. But how can we make them into one slightly more complex sentence and by doing so, make our writing better to get better grades]? The answer is to use a semi colon in our writing. Instead of adding in and between the two sentences, we use a semi colon like this.

The girl played the violin so well; she was an expert at the instrument.

There is a sense of balance in this sentence, like two children playing on a see-saw and the see-saw being level on both sides. That is because the semi colon is used correctly. If the sentence however, contains two opposing things, then it gets confusing to understand what is being said.

Apostrophes

As before, we looked at how apostrophes are used in two different ways. One is where something is left out, like couldn’t where the o is left out of the word and possessive, where something or someone owns something else, like Robert’s book.

We also looked at how that little thing called an apostrophe can confuse us when we want to put something like James’s into a sentence. To do so would be wrong for the correct way to do it is James’ bike. If you are wondering why, it is one of the rules of English language, that we do it this way, but as said earlier, language is always changing. Words are being introduced, like Parmo, which is a food stuff in the North East of the UK and sick, which now means something is good. So, if the English language is always changing, as we know, then the use of apostrophes will also change and nowadays, to write St. James’s Hospital on a sign or a letter is not seen as wrong. Teachers of my age will disagree however, for they believe that it should always be the case as it once was.

So, how do you know which is the right way to do this and to use this? Well, as I said in the last unit of work, my advice has always been try not to use them in your writing and in that way, you will write using Standard English, apart from when writing direct speech. But to know how to spot a mistake is essential.

Have a look at this below and try to see the mistakes made, on purpose, for you.

They could’nt believe how they’re luck had changed. It shouldnt have been that way at all, for they’re was’nt a single thing they could do about it all.

Did you spot the 4 mistakes there?

It should read as follows: They couldn’t believe how their luck had changed. It shouldn’t have been that way at all, for there wasn’t a single thing they could do about it all.

Now, I tricked you a little there didn’t I? Sometimes, we use a comma in the word they’re because we are taking a letter out, or omitting something. They’re should be They are and so we can get that wrong if we try to use their or there in its place.

Apostrophes are hard work but in the end, it comes down to you knowing what an apostrophe is and how it is used, but in your own writing, use them sparingly, as little as you can and you will find that your writing will improve.

Dashes

If you think about how and where you pause in a sentence, about where you use a comma for breath, you too can use a dash there for the same, or similar effect. But like most things, it can be over used.

But there is another way a dash can be used to great effect and that is to indicate an interruption when writing direct speech. If you write a story for your teacher, for homework, where there are ghosts and dilapidated mansions, where the story begins with thunder and lightning, then you might have your character, called Gail, say “But – no, you’re wrong!” There would be nothing wrong with that, either in the use of a dash or an apostrophe, but the pause is there for all to see and to read, so that when they read it, they make a dramatic pause, to share the shock of the person being troubled. The same can be true if there was a correction in the middle of a sentence.

Ellipses

Now here we get to an interesting and often misused tool in the English language. In any good novel you will see the use of three dots, one after another, to make a pause in something, or to shorten the sentence down. An example is here below:

The boy thought … that this would bring the story to an end.

The idea is that where the three dots are, the ellipsis, the words are not really needed for full meaning to be given and shared. The words are superfluous and not needed. In other words, a longer version of that sentence could be:

The boy thought about all of these aspects, thinking that this would bring the story to an end.

The meaning is there in both sentences so the use of ellipsis makes for easier reading and sometimes, clearer meaning. The question is, however, whether or not an ellipsis is used correctly. If the sentence is shortened and the meaning is the same or similar, then it is used correctly, but if the meaning is lost, then it is a mistake to use these three dots.

Consider this sentence:

Manufacturing on this level in the food industry, with its processes and needs, is a multi dimensional problem for all food manufacturers.

If we shorten it down and we get Manufacturing on this level in the food industry … is a multi dimensional problem for all food manufacturers then the meaning is slightly different and we begin to lose the plot when trying to understand.

This tool is used a lot to shorten things down, so as to make things more easily understandable, but with any tool used in English, it can be overused or used badly, so be careful.

Hyphens

The hyphen is something that is once again, used wrongly sometimes. In one sense, you could say a hyphen or a dash can do the same thing a comma does. If you write The boy, who could not be named, was found guilty of the offence then you could also write the same thing with hyphens and dashes, like this: The boy – who could not be named – was found guilty of the offence. But there are other instances where you could use such a thing as this. One would be a name, where two people meet and want to get married but the lady does not wish to lose her surname. So, if someone called Jones meets someone called Hamilton then they could have what we call a double barrelled surname of Jones-Hamilton.

Notice the use of the line between the two last names.

Another way we can use hyphens is to link words, or parts of words. We can say we are having a sleep-over at someone’s house. But then we can say that we like the mother-in-law where two hyphens are used showing a relationship between the words.

Capital Letters – Capitalisation

In the Year 7 unit, we looked at how accurate we need to be when using capital letters. If we use a name like James then it has to have a capital letter. If we talk about the capital city of France then we have to use a capital P for Paris. We know for example, that if we use a Proper noun, then it needs a capital letter, but can you tell the difference between words that need one and those that do not?

Task: Which is theincorrect use of the capital letter in the following words…

Paris                    paul                  Table                Michael                  Leeds
doncaster           new testament            the bible            happy new year

Titles

Sometimes, we need to use capital letters when we write a title. Imagine, for a second, if I asked you to write a story about a young boy who overcomes his disability and I asked you to call it The Fighter. You would plan a piece of writing and then give it a title but if you wrote it as the fighter then you would have made two mistakes before you even started writing your story [or poem, or play, or report].

Titles like Your Majesty when referring to royalty, or The Right Honourable if writing about an MP, need to have capital letters. It looks wrong if it is not used and when it comes to GCSE marking, if you make this mistake, then the person marking will not be as generous as if you had done it right.

There is also a format to titles and the use of capital letters, in that a title like The Diary of Anne Frank has capital letters throughout the beginning of each word. But have you noticed the word of in that title? It does not have a capital letter. It is just one of those examples of where the rule does not always apply but the small words are the ones that we allow for this to happen.

Sentence Level

As we move on to thinking of how we use sentences, we do so thinking of how we used things like synonyms, antonyms, prefixes and suffixes. Each one is important to understand, so you can see them in works of literature, or advertising and media things you will look at in your classroom. If you know what these are and how they are used, writing about them [in the text level section] will be so much easier.

Synonyms

A synonym is a word that has the same or similar meaning to another word. Words like beautiful, attractive, pretty, lovely and stunning all mean similar things. As synonyms, they can be used well, to describe something well. How many more can you think of for beautiful? Choosing the right synonym is not that hard. Think of the word funny. How many more words can be used that have the same or similar meaning?

Task: Write a sentence with 3 words of same meaning, using a comma to use them as adjectives to complete the sentence. [eg: The beautiful, attractive, stunning model pranced along the boardwalk.]

Antonyms

Think of the word that means the exact opposite of beautiful and you get the word ugly, or one like it. Ugly is the antonym of beautiful because it is the opposite of the word in meaning. If we are anti something, it means we are usually against it, like if we are anti-war, or anti-rap music. It means we stand against it, or something. Likewise, an antonym is a word that means the exact opposite of another.

Task: Using the following words, write down as many words as you can that are antonyms of the word.

Beautiful                 simple                       perfect                        peaceful

Bright                      shining                      dirty                            sparkling

When we write sentences that have any real meaning it is sometimes good to use synonyms and antonyms where we can to spice up our writing, to make it more enjoyable to read. Next time your teacher asks you to write something creative, like a story, have a go at using these skills to blow the teacher’s mind. You will be surprised how easy it is to do it right.

Prefixes

A prefix is used in a word as a beginning, with either pre or re or sub or mis being used. It can also begin with un, or dis, or non. Examples are prehistoric, rehabilitation, submission, misadventure, understanding, disability and nonsensical.

How many do you know? Write them all down now. Amaze yourself with how many you actually know.

Suffixes

If a prefix is a beginning of a word that is has pre or something like that, we put it at the beginning of a word because it is usually saying something about the word. Prehistoric is about history before history was made. A suffix therefore, is something that exists at the end of a word. Examples are words that end with -ful, -less, -able and -ible. All of these are used at the end of a word like faithful, fruitless, desirable and irresistible.

Words like this brighten up a sentence. They make your work entertaining to read and make for a very happy English teacher willing to give out awards left, right and centre.

The thing is though; how many do you know?

When you learn how to use these kinds of words in your sentences, you will see how much your work will improve. You will begin to be so proud of your progress as well and will begin to have faith in yourself in terms of getting the very highest GCSE grade possible when you are at the end of Year 11.

Sentences make English teachers happy when they are good, solid, quality ones. Yours are improving day by day, so it is now up to you to consider the types of sentence that you write now and how they can be improved upon.

Sentence Types

There are so many types of sentence to think of but we shall just look at four of them. Look at any sentence written and ask if it is a declarative, interrogative, imperative, or exclamatory one. Does it declare something to be the truth? Does it interrogate, or ask a question? Does it state an imperative, that something needs to happen? Or does it exclaim something, usually ending with an exclamation mark? [!]

Now we think of how we can improve those sentences. Have a look at this sentence below.

If, when the time comes, you decide to enter the race, you need to try your hardest, work hard before the race and then, run the best race that you can.

There is a technique there that you can use to improve your writing, but be careful not to over use it. If you add three things into a sentence, broken up by commas and using the word and to join the three things up into a list, then a simple sentence suddenly becomes a complex one and when it comes to English tests, or exams, you will do really well if you can master this skills.

Figurative Language

You might be thinking what is figurative language?

Put simply, it is the use of things like personification or an allusion to bring deeper and better meaning to your sentences. There are more figures of speech we will look at in the Year 9 unit of work but for today, we just look at these two.

Personification

Look at the word personification for a moment and split it up into two. The first part has the word person and then you have the suffix ending. This tells you that this is something about a person, or making something appear like a person. For example, if you write a short story about a cat but you put him in a hat and make him do things that a human would; walk, talk and sing, then you are using a form of personification in your writing.

The definition of personification is this: the attribution of a personal nature or human characteristics to something non-human, or the representation of an abstract quality in human form.

Think for a moment about a chair! Yes, a chair! It has legs. It has a back. Otherwise, it would be a stool. Now think about how you might bring that chair to life, giving it the characteristics of a human, so it thinks and speaks, as it walks on its legs, or lays down on its back. Disney cartoons do this all the time. In writing, when we do this, we use personification.

It is that simple.

Allusion

An allusion can be several things but in writing, we tend to look at three ideas. It is either a passing reference, like a reminder of something, or a a link between one thing and another, like when we say that the Bible is an allusion in art. Or, it is a metaphor, or parable [short earthly story with a heavenly meaning].

A passing reference to something else might be when we write that it is raining so hard that Noah will soon be here with his Ark. The thing you are writing about is the rain, a very British thing to do. But you are linking it with a story in the Bible. As a link between one thing and another the same sentence makes sense, but as a metaphor, or a parable, we can then look at a full text level piece of work and say it is symbolic as a metaphor.

We can say it represents something else entirely. Therefore, the story of Noah in his boat can be an allusion to having faith in God that God will provide for our needs.

When you can write using this, you are doing really well.

Formal And Informal Language

What is the difference between writing formally and informally?

If you write using informal language you are writing a note to someone, or something like a text message, where the rules of English Language do not really matter as long as you get the meaning into the sentence or text.

When you write using formal language, it is when you are writing something like a letter for a job [when that time comes]. Now letters and letter writing, using formal language, is the one thing that tends to appear in a GCSE exam, so between now and the end of Year 11, you will do more than just a few of them, I am sure.

So, what kind of language is used?

See if you can determine whether the sentences below are using formal language, or informal language.

I would like to apply for the post you have on offer and attach my CV for your perusal.

Hey Joe, you coming out tonight to the cinema with the gang?

R u ok

This thing is mint!

The Queen requests your presence at the next Garden Party at Buckingham Palace.

Can you see the formality and the informality? It is as simple as that.

But when you are writing formally, as well as informally, there is a rule that is so vital, it can be missed, or done wrongly, so that you make a huge mistake. It has a technical name as well. It is called the Subject-Verb Agreement.

But what is it and what does that mean?

The definition of this is: Subject verb agreement simply means the subject and verb of a sentence must agree in number. This means both need to be singular or both need to be plural.

Now that sounds a little confusing so look at this and say which one is right and which one is wrong.

Where is our text books?                                  Where are our text books?

Did you get it right? The correct sentence there is where are our text books? This is because of the plural rule we have looked at before now. Do you remember the woman and women bit earlier? If something is singular, then we use the word is in this sentence and if there is a plural word like books, then we use are.

As a rule of thumb as well, there is a simple thing to remember when writing. It is this: read it back to yourself [out loud] because your eyes will not see the mistake, but your ears will.

Text Level Work

Now we begin to look at how texts are put together and the aim is to show you three examples from classic literature including one from a writer recently published.

Charles Dickens: A Tale Of Two Cities [the opening section]

His novel begins like this:

It was the best of times. It was the worst of times. It was the age of wisdom. It was the age of foolishness. It was the epoch of belief. It was the epoch of incredulity. It was the season of Light. It was the season of Darkness. It was the spring of hope. It was the winter of despair. We had everything before us. We had nothing before us. We were all going direct to Heaven. We were all going direct the other way–in short, the period was so far like the present period, that some of its noisiest authorities insisted on its being received, for good or for evil, in the superlative degree of comparison only.
What can you notice in this section of writing?

Can you spot the opposites, the antonyms? Words like best and worst are put there, on purpose, to allow us to think in opposite ways. Can you spot the simple sentences? Sentences of six words in length are used well. Can you spot the use of capital letters? Words like Light and Darkness are use with capital letters. Why is this, do you think? It is not a mistake on Dickens’ part I can assure you. The use of the capital letter is a use of figurative language which we have just covered. Light represents, or links to goodness, or the goodness of God. Darkness is symbolic of, as well as an allusion to the devil and badness in the world. Therefore, the writer is saying that there was a time when goodness was as prevalent as evil in the world.

What else can you see?

Task: Make a list of all the things you see in the section from Dickens. See how many you can get.

Michael Morpurgo: Kensuke’s Kingdom

Morpurgo’s book has this section in it.

I stood there watching the junk until it was nothing but a spot on the horizon, until I could not bear to watch any more. By this time I had already decided how best I could defy him. I was so enraged that consequences didn’t matter to me. Not any more. With Stella beside me I headed along the beach, stopped at the boundary line in the sand and then, very deliberately stepped over it. As I did so, I let him know precisely what I was doing. “Are you watching old man?” I shouted. “Look! I’ve crossed over. I’ve crossed your silly line. And now I’m going to swim. I don’t care what you say. I don’t care if you don’t feed me. You hear me old man?”.

Then I turned and charged down the beach into the sea. I swam furiously, until I was completely exhausted and a long way from the shore. I trod water and thrashed the sea in my fury – making it boil and froth all around me. “It’s my sea as much as yours”, I cried. “And I’ll swim in it when I like”. I saw him then. He appeared suddenly at the edge of the forest. He was shouting something at me, waving his stick.

That was the moment I felt it, a searing, stinging pain in the back of my neck, then my back, and my arms too. A large, translucent white jellyfish was floating right beside me, its tentacles groping at me. I tried to swim away but it came after me, hunting me. I was stung again, in my foot this time. The agony was immediate and excruciating. It permeated my entire body like one continuous electric shock. I felt my muscles going rigid. I kicked for the shore, but I could not do it. My legs seemed paralysed, my arms too. I was sinking, and there was nothing I could do about it. I saw the jellyfish poised for the kill above me now. I screamed, and my mouth filled with water. I was choking. I was going to die, I was going to drown but I did not care. I just wanted the pain to stop. Death I knew would stop it.

Now it is your chance to select the things from this extract.

Task: List all the different things you can see in this extract from Michael Morpurgo. If you get past ten, you are doing well.

And finally, as the news presenters usually say, a piece from someone who has recently been published. He did not publish this but instead, wrote this as an aid for his students who were studying GCSE English in college and who needed to see how certain things were used in a short piece of writing.

How many elements that we have looked at can you locate?

Robert Johnson: Extract based on the film version of the book called Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows.

The battle had been raging for some time and the castle was now lying in ruins. Gone were the majestic looking turrets that had always stood there, tall and empowering to every student that had ever graced the hallowed halls of the school. And now, even in ruins, it still managed to command awe and majesty to those who considered it their home. This was school. This was home. This was a place of safety and now it had been attacked, assaulted by the one powerful force that everyone knew could prevail over good and defeat everyone once and for all.

The thought this was horrendous to even consider so those who stood on the side of good took their stand with the teachers of the school against the Lord of all evil, Lord Voldemort.  He had made his way inside the castle by this time, Nagini by his side, his trusted snake and was busily fighting with Harry a duel that would ultimately take one of them to their deaths. And even with all the melee going on around them, he strove forward, relentlessly chasing Harry through the corridors of the castle, mocking his inability to stand up to him, toying with his prey like a cat with a mouse.

It was then that the young man, who had risen from the little boy of eleven to the strapping young man of 18 decided that enough was enough and made his move. Screaming a blood curdling shout of anger he attacked Voldemort from a full frontal position and was blasted back thirty feet back into the grounds of the school. The shock wave that hit him knocked him out, momentarily. But this was not the end, not for this man, for he was determined to fulfil one task and nothing was going to stop him. As Harry and Voldemort exchanged blows with each other, sending spells and sparks from their wands into each other, the quiet rebellion began.

Nagini, tracking Harry, slithered and crept down the main staircase towards Hermione, who stood there, transfixed, horror in her eyes. What she did not realise at that time was that her saviour, the one who would save them all, was just emerging from out of the blackness of his unconscious state. Neville rose, looked about him and all the rubble and fixed his eyes on one thing, the sword of Gryffindor. And true to form, the sword was to reveal itself to the one who deserved it the most. And as Harry and Voldemort fought in a tumbling, towering cascade of arms and legs, falling relentlessly to the ground, everything went quiet in the courtyard, until the two wizards exchanged their final attack on each other. #

Suddenly, just as Nagini was beginning to reappear into the courtyard to attack Harry, a tall figure leapt out of the shadows, sword in hand, taking one powerful swing and severing the head of the snake in one blow. As he did so, the last horcrux that Voldemort had made had been destroyed and this left Harry with only one course of action, to finish off Voldemort for good. As their wands exchanged their force, the elder wand flew out of Voldemort’s hands and landed in Harry’s hand and Voldemort disintegrated before Harry’s eyes, never to be able to return to haunt or to destroy.  The deaths of his father and mother had been avenged but it still left a dull feeling of unfinished business. The one person on the other hand, who did feel the best at this point, quite content with his actions on this day, was the hero of the hour, Neville Longbottom. There could only be one to fulfil the prophecy; neither Harry nor Voldemort could kill each other, but there was one who had also tasted death at such a tender age he was to be the one who would ultimately triumph.

What can you see in this one?

Task: Using as many elements as you can that you have studied in this unit of work, write a story, like the Harry Potter one above, based on your favourite film, or TV series. Make each character come to life. Write no more than 400 words. Then, when planned and written, submit it to the Facebook page for this website for publication.

Try to make it as accurate as possible.

Above all, enjoy your writing and try to enter as many competitions as you can where writing is involved. Make it a fun thing to do, rather than just for study.

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