How to add quotes into PEE Chains
There are 2 ways one can do this.
- The ‘and then he said’ style. Eg. In The Woman In Black Kipps sees the mysterious woman dressed in black, in the church at the funeral. He turns to the man with him after and says “…..insert quote here………” which means that he is concerned for her well-being.In this PEE chain, there is a POINT, followed by a piece of text, or EVIDENCE and then completed with some thoughts from you, or EXPLANATION from your point of view. Good ones get a D grade.
- The ‘fully embedded quote” style. See example below….At the beginning of the chapter, he is sorting through the paperwork of Mrs Drablow’s estate and nothing much else is happening, but then, Spider, the dog, loaned by Mr Daily as company for him whilst in Eel Marsh House, reacts to a sound and it is this sound that gets Kipps curious as to what has caused it. He is alone with the dog in the old house and tells the reader that “every hair on her [the dog] body was on end, her ears were pricked, her tail erect, the whole of her tense, as if ready to spring.” Clearly, this is a sign of growing curiosity, rather than fear, but it also shows just how much he fears his surroundings and the strangeness of them, coupled with previous events in the village. It makes the reader ask the obvious question; what will happen next?
In this piece of text, the story is told a little more, but it is much more subtle as a way of explaining your thoughts. It is a much more effective manner of writing also and much more fluent, achieving a higher score, into the A and A* grades if used throughout an essay.
The trick is to check at the end of the writing this thought – if I take away the speech marks from the quote, does the sentence still make sense? If it does, then you have done it correctly!
Tasks to complete…
- Choose a piece of text from Woman In Black that is less than 20 words in length.
- Try to adopt Style No. 2 and do that sort of PEE chain.
- Then think about how much it is better than the other style.
- Use it in your essays from then on, which ever book, poem or play you are writing about.